From e5f846e76b48489a70cd6e58b329dad2a4da6303 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Malin Freeborn <malinfreeborn@posteo.net>
Date: Thu, 29 Feb 2024 08:15:23 +0100
Subject: [PATCH] clean up examples
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play.tex | 32 +++++++++++++++-----------------
1 file changed, 15 insertions(+), 17 deletions(-)
diff --git a/play.tex b/play.tex
index a6fbac91..ceb60f63 100644
--- a/play.tex
+++ b/play.tex
@@ -48,7 +48,7 @@ How much the troupe actually engage with their \gls{guard} missions depends on t
What did you do?
\item[Alice:]
Well, Grogfen helped a trader getting to town\ldots
- (but I don't want to tell her about entering a town, or the \glsentrylongpl{sp} she paid us)
+ (but I don't want to tell her about entering a town, or the \glsentrylongpl{sp} she paid us).
\item[\gls{gm}:]
So how will you explain how long the mission took?
Remember, she has a record of when Grogfen left the \gls{jotter} who gave her the mission.
@@ -128,15 +128,13 @@ How much the troupe actually engage with their \gls{guard} missions depends on t
It says I'm a `Loner'.
\item[\gls{gm}:]
That makes sense.
- Society and social ties are very important in \gls{fenestra}, so people can end up in the \gls{guard} just because they don't have anyone arranging a safe position for them.
+ Family and social ties are very important in \gls{fenestra}, so people can end up in the \gls{guard} just because they don't have anyone arranging a safe position for them.
\item[Siobhan:]
This equipment looks a bit rubbish.
Can't I get something better?
At least some proper armour?
\end{description}
-
}{
-
Starting equipment and beliefs all come wrapped together with the core concept in character creation.
This helps new people get up and running quickly.
@@ -159,7 +157,7 @@ How much the troupe actually engage with their \gls{guard} missions depends on t
Sure, but how would a loner ask for equipment?
What would they do?
\item[Siobhan:]
- He's probably ask her when she's alone.
+ He'd probably ask her when she's alone.
Knock politely, and just explain he's not been given the tools to survive.
\end{description}
@@ -176,15 +174,15 @@ How much the troupe actually engage with their \gls{guard} missions depends on t
\begin{description}
\item[\gls{gm}:]
\Gls{jotter} Cartpike agrees to give you the armour, as long as you head out on the new mission, immediately.
- Sootfilch, Grimesinge, and Mossboke will journey out to two neighbouring \glspl{village} -- that means a `walled village' -- and cut around the perimeter.
+ Sootfilch, Grogfen and Mossboke will journey out to two neighbouring \glspl{village} -- that means a `walled village' -- and cut around the perimeter.
\item[Matt:]
We're bush-whacking?
\item[\gls{gm}:]
Yes.
If the forest grows too dense, and approaches \pgls{village}, it means predators can get close, and attack the farmers there.
%!
- Sinkwall lies eight miles North, and they say that the swamp hag lives nearby.
- Soumarch takes 12 miles march South, but has \pgls{bothy} half way along.
+ Sinkwall lies ten miles North, and they say that the swamp hag lives nearby.
+ Soumarch takes fourteen miles march South, but has \pgls{bothy} half way along.
\Gls{jotter} Cartpike gives everyone two days' rations (hardened cheese and mutton pies), and lets you pick your poison.
\end{description}
@@ -223,7 +221,7 @@ How much the troupe actually engage with their \gls{guard} missions depends on t
\item[Matt:]
And Laiquon's an elf, so he can ignore the cold.
\item[\gls{gm}:]
- Oh yea, the \gls{jotter} will have warm clothes for everyone else, but you humans two will have to take 2 \glspl{fatigue} from the freezing weather.
+ Oh yea\ldots the \gls{jotter} will have warm clothes for everyone else, but you humans two will have to take 2 \glspl{fatigue} from the freezing weather.
\end{description}
}{
Travelling times are easy to work out.
@@ -250,11 +248,11 @@ How much the troupe actually engage with their \gls{guard} missions depends on t
We'll see later\ldots
\end{description}
}{
- The `encounter' with traders could have been broken down into a back-and-forth series of `hail, good traveller', but skipping to the decision-points grants the game a faster pace.
-
Purchases can get tricky, as tricksters are everywhere.
A bad roll can leave the buyer holding useless goods, or buying services from a chancer.
Most of the `secondary skills' (like Crafts and Wyldcrafting) can come in useful for trades.
+
+ The `encounter' with traders could have been broken down into a back-and-forth series of `hail, good traveller', but skipping to the decision-points grants the game a faster pace.
}
\sideBySide{
@@ -280,9 +278,9 @@ How much the troupe actually engage with their \gls{guard} missions depends on t
}{
When two people (or creatures) act against each other, the player rolls at \tn[7], plus their opponent's score.
- $$2D6 + \underbrace{-1 + 0} ~vs~ 7 + \underbrace{2 + 2 + 2}$$
+ $$2D6 + \underbrace{-1 + 0} ~vs~ 7 + \underbrace{2 + 3}$$
- The creature's total Bonus is +6 (with a snow-camouflage Bonus), so Alice must roll at \gls{tn} 13.
+ The creature's total Bonus is +5, so Alice must roll at \gls{tn} 12.
}
\sideBySide{
@@ -294,7 +292,7 @@ How much the troupe actually engage with their \gls{guard} missions depends on t
\item[Siobhan:]
The what?
\item[\gls{gm}:]
- ``Woodspy'' -- a great land-octopus, able to camouflage, with a load of tentacles.
+ ``Woodspy'' -- a great land-octopus, with a load of tentacles, able to camouflage.
It grabs her and starts to slither away, yanking its way through the trees while holding Grogfen tight above its head.
\item[Siobhan:]
What do we do?
@@ -306,10 +304,10 @@ How much the troupe actually engage with their \gls{guard} missions depends on t
Okay, \dicef{7} \ldots sorry, Alice\ldots
\end{description}
}{
- Everyone starts combat with 3~\glspl{ap} plus their Speed Bonus.
+ Everyone starts combat with 3~\glsentryfullpl{ap} plus their Speed Bonus.
Having more \glspl{ap} lets you act before others, and do more.
- Most combat actions resist an opponent, so spending \pgls{ap} usually forces an opponent to spend one too.
+ Since most combat actions resist an opponent, spending \pgls{ap} usually forces an opponent to spend one too.
These forced-expenditures can push characters into negative \glspl{ap}.
A character on negative \glspl{ap} feels seriously flustered, and takes the negative as a penalty to their actions.
@@ -330,7 +328,7 @@ How much the troupe actually engage with their \gls{guard} missions depends on t
\item[\gls{gm}:]
What does he say?
\item[Matt:]
- `Solid frost, and woodspy tomb'?
+ `Solid frost, make a woodspy tomb'?
\item[\gls{gm}:]
Well the snow responds, freezing solid, and holding a couple of tentacles tight.
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