From 3090e8e51d63e47de6aa07bc7ea3adf404dcdbe0 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Malin Freeborn <malinfreeborn@posteo.net>
Date: Sun, 28 Apr 2024 13:17:04 +0200
Subject: [PATCH] edit eyeline

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 eyeline.tex | 6 +++---
 1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-)

diff --git a/eyeline.tex b/eyeline.tex
index f36a5697..bed754cf 100644
--- a/eyeline.tex
+++ b/eyeline.tex
@@ -17,11 +17,11 @@ On Earth, the humble, docile cow used to be the auroch -- a prehistoric beast wi
 We tamed it, bred the wild out of it, just like we tamed most of the land and everything on it.
 On \gls{fenestra}, aurochs still roam.
 
-Humans survive by carving out \glspl{village}, burning and slashing away the woods into a large clearing, with a walled settlement placed in the middle like a nipple.
+Humans survive by carving out space for \glspl{village}, burning and slashing away the woods into a large clearing, with a walled settlement placed in the middle like a nipple.
 With the wilderness continually trying to heal the festering wound that is civilisation, the \gls{village} must always hold the line.
 
-Archers defend from inside the \gls{village} walls, while the \gls{guard} must remain outside.
-As the most downtrodden, poor, criminal, stupid, the \gls{guard} act as a first line of defense, a human shield.
+Archers defend from inside the \gls{village} walls, while the \gls{guard} must remain, or in the \gls{village}'s \gls{broch}.
+As the most downtrodden, poor, criminal, stupid, the \gls{guard} act as a first line of defence, a human shield.
 They are tasked with maintaining the forest perimeter with fire, and slaying any beast that crosses the treeline.
 
 But most importantly, the \gls{guard} must venture into wild, and mine it for essential resources -- mushrooms and herbs, auroch meat, basilisk hide, griffin's feathers, and so much more.
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